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题目"Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places."
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Laws and morality are symbiotic and interdependent. While laws are tangible and rigid, the morality is intangible and more prone to be flexible. They supplement each other, when one of them is not functioning, we could still resort the other one.

, \1 Z+ ?# d( k- F9 `' XGoverning a country under a legal system is what the most countries do nowadays. Black characters against white paper explicitly stipulate what the people’s rights and obligations are. Once a rigid and fixed law comes into force, the society can immediately reach a consensus, so that the societal administration is facilitated and the punishment to incompliance is much more convincing.
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9 r8 D& {1 \* G5 p+ |Another system to rule the people is moral system. It is a completely flexible system, in comparison with the legal system. The conviction is totally based on morality, where sympathy and selfish motivation may play roles. The same incompliance might receive even contrary judgment, so in this way it is impossible to maintain the justice and people would no longer advocate your governance.

It is true that along with the gradually varying circumstances the obsolete rigid laws are highly likely shown to be inadaptable to the encountered situation. Revisions or complements are inevasible at the legislature. But despite all that, we have to notice the circumstances are persistently altering, so do the minds of people. In case that the laws became so flexible that they are keen to perfectly adapt each situation, then the problem should arise with executability. The laws could be so fast reactive that people violate the law without consciousness and executors judge cases with out of date regulations. This is apparently not what we want to see. So in the other words, laws must keep some of its rigidness, make full use of the societal tolerance and morality control, and change themselves only when unavoidable.

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吃花生的大灰狼

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  b) A# C, h; z# twhen one of them is not functioning, we could still resort the other one.

I would say: when one of them does not work/function, we could resort to the other (one).

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learnEnglish

怎么只有看客啊
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大家只管来拍好了啊
Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-13 20:29

) y, }* ]9 _- z  Z. eSorry, I can't read it yet.
Because for me, there are many new words in it.

& Q- t- M. T3 s3 b8 Kwhen one of them is not functioning, we could still resort the other one.

4 V' H# k6 @6 N8 c( cI would say: when one of them does not work/function, we could resort to the other (one).
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9 N! S$ }: z* R" T9 N% [8 w6 H吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-13 20:53

Thanks for your comment

Sorry, I can't read it yet.
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; g: O% U/ \" j; x, s( D' ylearnEnglish 发表于 2009-9-13 21:43

吃花生的大灰狼

I haven't quite understood these two sentences.
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In case that the laws became so flexible that they are keen to perfectly adapt each situation, then the problem should arise with executability. The laws could be so fast reactive that people violate the law without consciousness and executors judge cases with out of date regulations.

I haven't quite understood these two sentences.

In case that the laws became so flexible that they are keen to perfectly adapt each situation, then the problem should arise with executabil ...
吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-13 22:04

7 v8 q- ^' ^4 Q我是想表达，如果法律修改的太快，情况稍微一变就改。那么法律就无法执行了。执法者不熟悉法律，而平民也不熟悉法律，可能就无意中触犯了法律。

Chris81

just something off the top of my head:
% @9 ^" O4 [8 {& K. open up sth pertinent to the statement in the topic, about property of laws/ morality is the supporting item
. avoid using "completely". this sets a sharp contrast.
: A$ O1 Y) h/ \, M7 q8 @! O$ z( h2 M+ ?. not sure "flexible" means being modified frequently as you meant: it is clearly written, flexibility in terms of considering circumstances, times, places. That calls for "OFF".
  Y; t- Y1 g% \  k3 P. lack of structure
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definition, functionality, purpose to serve (...)
-> if it is to ensure the justice/right, then its about equity, another factor Morality is to be considered
-> rigid laws&moral system
-> being flexible helps promote the fairness, however rigid fixed laws are more executable

just something off the top of my head:
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. avoid using "completely". this sets a sharp co ...
0 C6 y, n% ?: k& ~% Y! h# HChris81 发表于 2009-9-13 23:09

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thx for your comments
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7 \$ ]2 Z! C% c2 mflexibility 是要考虑circumstance  不就是要及时不断修改low吗？
结构我觉得也很清晰啊
morality我是想说不fair，太主观了

吃花生的大灰狼

For your reference:
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It has been widely recognized that laws could never be complete, even if they are amended frequently since future is not predictable.
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This is why institutions are essential.

For your reference:

  B8 S  r& [, ]; h+ ]  DIt has been widely recognized that laws could never be complete, even if they are amended frequently since future is not predictable.
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吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-13 23:54

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我没说laws complete了呀。

吃花生的大灰狼

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Anonymous 发表于 2009-9-14 00:01

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No.
It's just for your reference since you mentioned the adaptability of the law to circumstances.

No.
It's just for your reference since you mentioned the adaptability of the law to circumstances.
吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-14 00:03

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最后一次顶贴 看有没有人来拍

karlfriedrich

% E" L& D; y9 Y/ E+ m% s7 E3 Q0 S* qwhen one of them is not functioning, we could still resort the other one.
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7 I4 E/ O+ o9 X4 {; Z5 V吃花生的大灰狼 发表于 2009-9-13 20:53

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But despite all that, we have to notice the circumstances are persistently altering, so do the minds of people
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but despite of that, we have to....

agree with u
besides
But despite all that, we have to notice the circumstances are persistently altering, so do the minds of people
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+ T6 d. C2 l1 ^% Y9 Rfor the above, I would like say
but despite of that, we have ...
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karlfriedrich

suggestions for a writting in a examination.
& o+ R, a0 v% a# J4 n1.structure is very very important. usually, a article is made up of 4 paragraphes. one of them is conclusion.the other three are supporting points.
7 x. _: K( N$ Q8 D) i* ~) `: y6 \2.examples or metaphor is a useful skill
' ?0 A& S8 x$ a# Q9 D" l- n3.the american do not like the saying: a coin has two sides. for them, either true or false, either good or bad.
just suggestions for the examination.

suggestions for a writting in a examination.
0 D# F% r4 i( V, l: A8 P4 q1.structure is very very important. usually, a article is made up of 4 paragraphes. one of them is conclusion.the other three are supporting points.
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thx

karlfriedrich

wish you success in the GRE

wish you success in the GRE
- b9 V# a+ }  @- Lkarlfriedrich 发表于 2009-9-16 00:04

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就想练练写作

Lens

加油

看完你的文章我要说的太多了，但请不要介意我的说法。我本人写过不少英语学术方面的东西，都是经济与计算机相结合的。在学学术写作时得到不少必要的信息，希望大家一起分享。
我只挑你的写作毛病，你的语法上错误也 ...
yiyienglish 发表于 2009-9-16 01:06

, e: n2 z8 ]9 c# r5 b6.5都拿不到吗
8 C' u9 L4 O: s6 e* O% y% e3 x那我修改一下

忘记了说，你的通篇的定冠词用法都一直错到底，得看看语法才好。对不起，请参看我今天写的文章，关于语法的。
: _  a$ X. ?5 @; A1 s; g, {1 w/ byiyienglish 发表于 2009-9-16 01:09

4 Y# ]5 M* _, B+ N; U你没讲定冠词怎么用嘛，
这荒郊野外的，你的书叫我哪里去买啊

learnEnglish

看完你的文章我要说的太多了，但请不要介意我的说法。我本人写过不少英语学术方面的东西，都是经济与计算机相结合的。在学学术写作时得到不少必要的信息，希望大家一起分享。
( s% E9 ]$ B# _& @6 \% p. s我只挑你的写作毛病，你的语法上错误也 ...
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It is true that 跟But despite all that是对应的啊
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看完你的文章我要说的太多了，但请不要介意我的说法。我本人写过不少英语学术方面的东西，都是经济与计算机相结合的。在学学术写作时得到不少必要的信息，希望大家一起分享。
" D8 N$ \2 g' V6 Y我只挑你的写作毛病，你的语法上错误也 ...
yiyienglish 发表于 2009-9-16 01:06

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It is true that 跟But despite all that是对应的啊
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吃花生的大灰狼

你没讲定冠词怎么用嘛，
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* z* I0 [# u6 @& w' BAnonymous 发表于 2009-9-16 11:52

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  w4 d2 r9 m8 k6 W$ }( XI think his comments are pertinent and helpful.
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You may consult a grammar textbook. It's really tough to explicate its usage in a couple of words.

0 ^$ d& ~3 [! f" c! dFor example,
Laws and morality are symbiotic and interdependent. While laws are tangible and rigid, the morality is intangible and more prone to be flexible.
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9 A" N  o8 N+ H% n& J0 OIn addition, "prone to be flexible" sounds a little bit weird to me. Maybe I haven't understood you correctly.

吃花生的大灰狼

Another example:

Another system to rule the people is    moral system. It is a completely flexible system, in comparison with the legal system.